Comments for automatonrevolution http://automatonrevolution.com Storm in an Ale Mug Wed, 24 Aug 2011 17:23:40 +0000 hourly 1 http://wordpress.org/?v=3.1 Comment on First Line Friday: All that was left for him was duty. by Keith http://automatonrevolution.com/12/first-line-friday-all-that-was-left-for-him-was-duty/comment-page-1/#comment-39152 Keith Wed, 24 Aug 2011 17:23:40 +0000 http://automatonrevolution.com/?p=83#comment-39152 Its goo to know that it can cause such reactions, mate. However, it would be a teensy bit cheeky of me to claim lots of credit for the core story since, at its heart, its Sir Bedivere returning Excalibur to the Lady Of The Lake after Arthur's death. I just sort of put my own weird slant on the whole thing. :P Its goo to know that it can cause such reactions, mate. However, it would be a teensy bit cheeky of me to claim lots of credit for the core story since, at its heart, its Sir Bedivere returning Excalibur to the Lady Of The Lake after Arthur’s death. I just sort of put my own weird slant on the whole thing. :P

]]> Comment on First Line Friday: All that was left for him was duty. by Patrick http://automatonrevolution.com/12/first-line-friday-all-that-was-left-for-him-was-duty/comment-page-1/#comment-39135 Patrick Tue, 23 Aug 2011 23:12:41 +0000 http://automatonrevolution.com/?p=83#comment-39135 That put a chill down my spine... probably amplified by some surprisingly appropriate accompaniment (if you don't have Helios' album Eingya Keith I'll need to loan you it or make a copy or something: the track "First Dream Called Ocean" is eerily concordant with this piece...) I'm glad you broke the "rules" and polished this one, it's brilliant. Again I want to know more: it feels like a glimpse at a fully realised world with a big story going on... can't decide if I'm more intrigued to know what comes next or what led the knight here, but I'm intrigued! That put a chill down my spine… probably amplified by some surprisingly appropriate accompaniment (if you don’t have Helios’ album Eingya Keith I’ll need to loan you it or make a copy or something: the track “First Dream Called Ocean” is eerily concordant with this piece…)

I’m glad you broke the “rules” and polished this one, it’s brilliant. Again I want to know more: it feels like a glimpse at a fully realised world with a big story going on… can’t decide if I’m more intrigued to know what comes next or what led the knight here, but I’m intrigued!

]]> Comment on First Line Friday: All that was left for him was duty. by Kai http://automatonrevolution.com/12/first-line-friday-all-that-was-left-for-him-was-duty/comment-page-1/#comment-38964 Kai Mon, 15 Aug 2011 12:32:12 +0000 http://automatonrevolution.com/?p=83#comment-38964 Wow. I love this. :) Wow. I love this. :)

]]> Comment on First Line Monday – It was almost painful to look at her. by Lurch Kimded http://automatonrevolution.com/01/first-line-monday-it-was-almost-painful-to-look-at-her/comment-page-1/#comment-38731 Lurch Kimded Tue, 02 Aug 2011 10:12:18 +0000 http://automatonrevolution.com/?p=80#comment-38731 Excellent stuff mate, really enjoying these Excellent stuff mate, really enjoying these

]]> Comment on First Line Monday – It was almost painful to look at her. by Patrick http://automatonrevolution.com/01/first-line-monday-it-was-almost-painful-to-look-at-her/comment-page-1/#comment-38719 Patrick Mon, 01 Aug 2011 23:12:24 +0000 http://automatonrevolution.com/?p=80#comment-38719 Awesome. I love it. I love the way you've evoked the tangle and tension of battle. I love the study in human nature: becoming captivated by something/someone and aware of that captivation but unable to explain it. Most of all though I love how you've risen to my (unintentional) challenge - there's no fear here: this is joy and wonder and humanity's best all shining out from the page. Thank you! Awesome.

I love it. I love the way you’ve evoked the tangle and tension of battle. I love the study in human nature: becoming captivated by something/someone and aware of that captivation but unable to explain it. Most of all though I love how you’ve risen to my (unintentional) challenge – there’s no fear here: this is joy and wonder and humanity’s best all shining out from the page. Thank you!

]]> Comment on First Line Friday: The Birds Swooped Low. by Patrick http://automatonrevolution.com/22/first-line-friday-the-birds-swooped-low/comment-page-1/#comment-38476 Patrick Sat, 23 Jul 2011 14:16:44 +0000 http://automatonrevolution.com/?p=78#comment-38476 Nice. This one feels more self contained than the last - there's certainly scope for it to go on (or indeed back) and the world you've created there is compelling enough that I definitely want to know more about it. It isn't as frenetically gripping as the last piece though and the ending feels like an end... puts me in mind of a Philip K. Dick short story (in the style and substance, nothing specific). Mission accomplished on the positive feel and sense of wonder. You could go further: the narrative is still driven by fear, even though that turns out to be unfounded. It would be really fun to read you using a different driving force... Nice.

This one feels more self contained than the last – there’s certainly scope for it to go on (or indeed back) and the world you’ve created there is compelling enough that I definitely want to know more about it. It isn’t as frenetically gripping as the last piece though and the ending feels like an end… puts me in mind of a Philip K. Dick short story (in the style and substance, nothing specific).

Mission accomplished on the positive feel and sense of wonder. You could go further: the narrative is still driven by fear, even though that turns out to be unfounded. It would be really fun to read you using a different driving force…

]]> Comment on First Line Friday: The Birds Swooped Low. by Lurch Kimded http://automatonrevolution.com/22/first-line-friday-the-birds-swooped-low/comment-page-1/#comment-38452 Lurch Kimded Fri, 22 Jul 2011 18:09:11 +0000 http://automatonrevolution.com/?p=78#comment-38452 Lol... not "bird" that should have been "feel" :) Lol… not “bird” that should have been “feel” :)

]]> Comment on First Line Friday: The Birds Swooped Low. by Lurch Kimded http://automatonrevolution.com/22/first-line-friday-the-birds-swooped-low/comment-page-1/#comment-38451 Lurch Kimded Fri, 22 Jul 2011 18:08:38 +0000 http://automatonrevolution.com/?p=78#comment-38451 Nice. Enjoyed that, I did get a more positive bird, a feeling of panic but tinged with wonder too. Nice. Enjoyed that, I did get a more positive bird, a feeling of panic but tinged with wonder too.

]]> Comment on First Line Friday by Kai http://automatonrevolution.com/15/first-line-friday/comment-page-1/#comment-38343 Kai Tue, 19 Jul 2011 10:33:11 +0000 http://automatonrevolution.com/?p=75#comment-38343 I loved this. More please? I loved this. More please?

]]> Comment on First Line Friday by Lurch Kimded http://automatonrevolution.com/15/first-line-friday/comment-page-1/#comment-38283 Lurch Kimded Sat, 16 Jul 2011 09:17:54 +0000 http://automatonrevolution.com/?p=75#comment-38283 Good stuff mate, keep it up :) Good stuff mate, keep it up :)

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